Description: This term I am with Rebecca instead of Troy for writing and we are doing ideas.Our inspiration was
a cat in a cage with a bird sitting on top. I wrote from the cats point of view and the bird was bad to
her. My goal is to have a clear structure, which means to have a clear beginning, middle and end
Hi, I'm spark the cat and that is my worst enemy sun the bird,well cannery to be exact and an annoying one to.
So I was wandering around minding my own business when sun flew by with the cat treats.I leaped up and grabbed
them so we wouldn't tease me,( He likes to tease me but now your here he can,t.) Bop! Ow i will get you.
So i ran after sun and I almost had him (I am glad I did all that training with the feline patrol) and i just missed him by a second
and so i went straight into sun cage! sun laughed and laughed because he had shut the door to the cage so i was not able to get
out. i banged on the cage but that hurt my paw.
so instead of giving up i went on biting and clawing until it broke. i shot out with the speed of a tiger and the agility of a deer.
The thought of deer makes my mouth water. wait what a good idea that is. i can use a deer to ... no that would not work.
Well I have to go so by for now
I think that you did a good job at adding detail and I think that you have been working on your goal. I also think that you did a nice job at not going of the subject. I think that you could work on making them talk maybe next time. I also think that you could work on having a bigger story instead of a little on and make some phargrahs to make it look good.
Evaluation: I think i did good with using my ideas and next time I think I could join them together